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TopicHow do you feel about commas used to emphasize pauses but...
SeabassDebeste
10/08/23 9:14:47 AM
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azuarc posted...


Depends on the character and their delivery. I use dashes and ellipses for types of pause rather than merely length, and with some characters, it can get way too punctuation heavy if you use these every time you want the reader to parse their speech with separation. For an OC, I would still never do this, but I've been writing fanfiction lately, and when the reader knows a character and how they're portrayed vocally, you want to emulate that. Sadly, simply writing "<character name> said," is not enough to force that. At least not in my head when I subvocalize it. I want to use every trick at my disposal, and sometimes that means using a questionable comma as long as it isn't incredibly forced.

I'll look for an example next time I'm revising.

fiction is pretty different from actual conversational writing tho

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