Board 8 > What do you think of this concept for a story

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RevolverSaro
03/13/12 11:49:00 PM
#1:


2000 years have passed since a war broke out and devastated the Earth. Since then, society has been rebuilt to late 1800's/early 1900s levels of technology.

Prior to the downfall of society much of humanity lived on the moon. Waiting for the time when the earth would be recovered enough to go back, they bide their time. Occasionally they send scouts to Earth, to observe the conditions and report progress made. The story begins when a young boy and two others are sent to earth as scouts. On his first day on earth, the boy nearly drowns in a river, only to be saved by two young girls who were near by.

The girls are the daughters of a wealthy mine owner. To the boy's surprise, one of the girls looks exactly like the queen of the moon. Anyway, the mine owner takes a liking to the boy and hires him on as their chauffeur.

Some time passes and the boy begins to fully integrate into Earth's society. Unknown to him though, the Queen of the Moon has decided to begin the migration back to Earth. Negotiations between the various leaders of Earth and the Moon have been going south, with the various territories refusing to give any land to the Moon Migrants. Deciding that negotiations have fallen through, the people of the Moon begin their migration by force. The people of Earth are completely outmatched in terms of technology, and initially the moon migrants are able to quickly gather a bit of territory. However, their advance is halted when the main character finds advanced weapons from Earth's dark past. Torn between his new home and his loyalty to the queen of the moon, he seeks balance between the Earth and the Moon.

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Achromatic
03/13/12 11:51:00 PM
#2:


Boring, cliched, and would need to be insanely well written for me to care at all.

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TheKnightOfNee
03/13/12 11:51:00 PM
#3:


Needs more dinosaurs.

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MaridaCruz
03/13/12 11:52:00 PM
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Needs more Gundams

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Forceful_Dragon
03/14/12 2:52:00 AM
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society on earth is 1800s/1900s and society on moon is still space age level?


Does not mesh imo.

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vcharon
03/14/12 2:55:00 AM
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I'd say the moon is too close for that to be believable. Maybe set the colonists on an extrasolar planet?

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Ytterbium_70
03/14/12 4:16:00 AM
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...I don't know if I have any new criticisms, although it seems kind of boring to me.

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Raka_Putra
03/14/12 4:19:00 AM
#8:


Yeah, it is rather cliche.

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pjbasis
03/14/12 4:32:00 AM
#9:


If the gameplay is good whatever.


...This is a game right?

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Pram_the_Oracle
03/14/12 5:10:00 AM
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Not my kind of setting, but other than that, depends on how you pull it off.

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