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(+) Yeah! (+)

Well, that is better than nothing.

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Short preview of Chapter 4:
After Gravy's defeat, Chris' journey can officially begin. Crimson brings up the topic; special abilities, and we get to hear about the current status on special abilities of both Chris and Crimson, as well as an explanation of what special abilities really are.

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I wish I had drawing skills.

I would totally draw up a little manga-inspired comic for this.

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I knew I was forgetting something.

Good chapter! Looks like Chris has super human athleticism (strength, speed, etc)

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All the proteins, vitamins, and carbs of your grandma's best turkey dinner, plus 15% alcohol.

Tomorrows chapter also wont be posted on time but in the next 2-3 hours, I'm sorry.

pjbasis posted...

I wish I had drawing skills.

I would totally draw up a little manga-inspired comic for this.

Whoa, you're awesome! I have no drawing skills either. I wonder if anyone here has a great talent for that. Maybe great enough for it to be called a special ability?

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Chapter 4 – Special Abilities

Gravy was now completely unconscious. Chris released him and he fell bloody to the ground.
What... what did I just witness? Crimson thought. Those were some incredible punches. He doesn't look like a very strong guy, but apparently he really is. “Umm, thanks for stopping that burglar.” She said, kinda scared.
Chris looked at her for a moment. Suddenly, a grin appeared on his face.
“Yeah, no problem!” He exclaimed.
He sure got over that fast, but if what that burglar guy said is true then it's definitely very serious. This guy still gives me the creeps. Crimson looked down and smiled. “Alright, that was nice of you, I've decided to give you a ride until we reach my city.” Then she looked up and saw Chris was already in the car. “What the hell are you doing!?” She yelled.
“Oh, I don't want to waste any time, lets go!”
I didn't even have a choice, did I... Crimson sighed, and then got into the car.
They drove for hours without saying a word to each other.
He's just sitting there smiling. This is so awkward. Crimson thought. I gotta, like, start a conversation somehow. “So Chris, that was pretty cool back there, you know, with the fighting. I mean, you didn't even have to use your special ability.”
“Special ability?” He asked and stopped smiling.
“Yeah, you know, everyone has one, though not everyone can use it effectively. Well that depends the ability I guess.”
Special abilities could also be called “talents” - but not just normal talents. They were hugely amplified; something a person has that they're extremely great at to insane levels. Though time, people used these “talents” in increasingly genius ways, and eventually they became known as special abilities.
“Yeah well, I don't know mine yet...”
“Oh, really?” Damn, wonderful topic Crimson.
“My brother got a really awesome one though!” Chris said. “He can use electricity!” Chris was suddenly very excited.
“Electricity? How does that work?”
“Well, have your tried bumping into someone and you get that little electric shock? Oh, or have you ever rubbed a balloon against your hair and put on the wall?”
“You're talking about static electricity right?”
“Yeah! That's what it's called! My brother is really good at using it. He knows exactly what to touch in which ways to manipulate electricity the right way, and can do it in high enough amounts for his opponents to get seriously electrocuted.”
Where have I heard about that before?... Crimson thought. “Anyways, my special ability is to fly! I'm not perfect, but I think it's amazing, I'm really grateful. You see I know just how to move my arms to stay in the air, something many people have dreamed of, but thought was impossible! I practiced jumping high too, to get up in the air.”
“Whoa! That's totally amzing!” Chris said with his mouth wide open. “Can I get your car then?”
“NO!” Damn him. “Anyways, what is your brother's name?”
“Cobain Achromatic. You know him?”
Something clicked in Crimson's brain. “Know him? He's the amazing rookie we hear so much about; Cobain of the Thunder!”

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Punching is his special ability...

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Cool electricity explanation.

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muddersmilk posted...

Punching is his special ability...

Are you denying the power of a single punch?

That will be Chris' finishing blow!

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did I sign up for this?

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Yes

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I just got done reading Chapter 4.

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Popular at school, but not as cool as SuperNiceDog, Guru Champ!

Here's the list of b8ers that signed up for this story, the ones with a - before them has at the very least been mentioned so far. If someone who signed up is missing I probably already included them in the story but forgot to add them to that damn list.

Alec
Bartz
Caelus
catastrophy
-Chris
Chronic
-Cobain
cody
Commo
-Crimson
Cyclo
Dark Young Link
Darren
dowolf
Dp
eddv
-ExTha
F Dragon
-foolmo
Genesis
gotspork
Granzon
-greengravy
Han
JC
jdizzy
Jeffrey / Bruno
Jeff Zero
JONA
Kazbar
KCF
Lockes
LotM
Luster
Maniac
Maria
mcflubbin
Mer
Mik_Pick
Natwaf / Pram / Tsunbiribiri / Lich_Sandro / Sugisaki_Ken
-Nick
Nio
Pirateking
pj
Pun
Raka
Ramm
Regaro
Ryoko
SBell
scotted
SEP
Sess
ShadowHalo
Shine
Stifled
XIII
Wicklebee
-Wigs
Ytter
Zazi

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tG

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Chapter 5 title revealed

Chapter 5 - Welcome to Efortsatak Town

The first four chapters is the beginning aka the introducing chapters. We have met the main character, and had a look at his past explaining why he's doing what he is, and what this is all about. We can call that the "Introduction Arc". Now starting chapter 5, we can begin the next arc, that I have simply chosen to call "Efortsarak Arc".

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Short preview on Chapter 5:
Chris and Crimson stop by a town called Efortsatak to get some food. Chris decides to explore the town further to get some team members, but it's not as easy as Chris thought it would be.

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Oh yeah btw, from now on chapters will be about twice the length!

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THIS STORY

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Luster Reloaded: Damn, that's some crazy s***.

pyro has great drawing skills, but I haven't seen him here in awhile.

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My Little Phineas and Ferb: Summer is Magic!
Aww, I lost to SuperNiceDog, Winner of the Rivalry Rumble Guru Contest

ctesjbuvf posted...

Oh yeah btw, from now on chapters will be about twice the length!

YAY!!!!!!!! I love longer chapters!!!!!!!!

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Tomorrow!

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Don't think I've properly tagged this.

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Chapter 5 – Welcome to Efortsatak Town

”... WHOA, THAT'S AMAZING!” Chris yelled with sparkling eyes. “Like, I knew he would be great, but damn.”
“How come you don't know that? I mean, he's your brother, you should,” Crimson asked.
“I don't pay attention to what's going on really.” Chris replied. “Man, I wanna have some awesome special ability too, like fire or something, and I want it right now!”
Well... “Don't worry Chris, you seem to already have some supernatural strength, you can do fine without!” That's actually not entirely true. He does have some very impressive fighting skills, but that only takes you so far, and nowhere near the level you'd need to be to achieve dreams like his. I still can't believe he got over that stuff with his mother so fast.
“Really? Because my brother can punch much harder than me. Eh, well, alright! Then let the romance begin!” Chris yelled!
Romance!? I think he has the wrong idea here... bah, I gotta make sure. “Damn, it's so hot in here, I just feel like ripping all my clothes apart.” Crimson said.
“Are you an idiot?” Chris answered.
“What...” Crimson was confused.
“Well, you could just open the window for one thing. Secondly, why the hell would you ruin your clothes just because it's hot? They're worth something you know, that's just dumb!”
“What...” Crimson said again. She was so confused that she'd crash the car if the road wasn't straight.
“I said-”
“No, no, I heard you! I'll... just open the sunroof.” Crimson said interrupting him.
“Well, there you go!” Chris said

They continued driving for a while. Crimson was having the same awkward feeling that she had when they first started driving.
He's still just sitting there smiling, so creepy.
“Oh hey Crimson! There's a town up ahead!”
“You're right. Sign says; 'Efortsatak Town'. Lets take a quick stop and get something to eat.”
They drove into town, found a place to eat and ordered something.
“Alright, I've been looking at the people here.” Chris said. “Anyone you think would make a good addition?
“To what?” Stop always thinking that I can read your mind!
“To my team of course. The more people we have on board, the more fun the adventure will be! I need to find two people, that should be enough.” Chris explained
“I haven't really been looking for anyone.” Crimson said. I wonder what else he's plotting...
“Really? Alright, I'm gonna go ask someone.” Chris said and got up.
“Just like that?! Hey wait, you need to pay first.” Crimson reminded him.
“I haven't brought any money.” Chris replied and left.
Damn him! He didn't prepare much for this journey outside of training.
Then Chris wandered off trying to find people who would join his team.

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Alright, lets see who looks cool... Chris thought looking at people in town. With some of them he looked close enough in their face to freak them out.
That guy got both cool hair and sunglasses! “Hey, you there! Hello! Sunglasses guy, hey!”
“What?”
“Join my team!” Chris said.
“Scram kid.”
Damn. Then lets see... Oh that guy has a sword, cool! “Hey, what's your name?”
“SEP, why?” The man replied.
“Wanna join my team?” Chris asked
“Not interested.” He said and walked away.
Maybe I'm not doing it right... I got it! They don't know what they're agreeing on! Alright... that guy! “Hey wanna be a revolutionary on my team?” Chris asked another guy.
“Did you just say revolutionary?” The man asked.
“Yeah, so whadda ya say?” Chris said.
“I'm a WR troop, and now I'm gonna ta-” Chris interrupted him by punching him in a way that Chris thought was gentle.
“Ouch, ****, damn that hurts!” The troop said. “Listen everyone in town!” He yelled. The people around turned and looked. “As a WR Troop, I command you to kill this guy for me!” People were suddenly getting very nervous and they froze where they stood. “Didn't you hear me!? I said that you- ARRGH”
It took people a few seconds to realize what had just happened; a man had sliced the troop clean in half with a gleaming sword.
“SEP!” Chris yelled “You changed your mind?”
“No.” SEP said simply. He turned sharply and walked away again. The townspeople were shocked and scared.
He's apparently a revolutionary too, he no longer has a choice. Alright what do I do... I got it! Gonna get Crimson, she has huge breasts. Huge breasts always seemed to convince Nick and the others at home to do stuff. It should work!

As Chris approached the store, Crimson was walking out of it. “Hey! Crimson!”
“Chris! Bring some money next time, you eat a whole lot you know, it's not cheap!”
“Yeah whatever, see that guy with the sword?” Chris asked.
“Yes” She replied
“He's a revolutionary, we need him to join, pull out your breasts!” Chris said right before Crimson slapped him.
“What the hell do you think I am!” Crimson screamed.
“We're in a hurry here!” Chris said, thinking SEP was leaving the place, but some guy in town wasn't letting him.
“That was so awesome dude! You're the man! **** those WR troops.”
“Shut up!” SEP said.
“Don't get the wrong idea dude! I'm with ya man, full respect!”
SEP drew his sword and sliced the man open. Everyone around was once again shocked and frightened, including Crimson. Chris on the other hand walked straight towards him.
“Hey, I thought you were a revolutionary! What's your problem?!” Chris said, pissed.
“I'll cut down anyone in my way. You wanna be sliced open too?” SEP asked
“Just you try” Chris said. He cracked his knuckles.

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Ahh, the power of boobs.

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Up for comments!

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Katastrofe? Is Cata's character a town?

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boobs

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Luster Reloaded 7:37pm
THE CALLOUT

Every user is a person.

But nothing has been named without reason.

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Daily bumb.

Are you all enjoying it so far?

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bumb

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"I don't think you know what "French" means." - As I Desire

ctesjbuvf posted...

Up for comments!

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I like the chapter so far. Chris is still denser than hardtack, which could lead to some hilarious stuff occuring.

Chapter 6: Title Revealed!
Chapter 6: Chris vs. SEP. The Power of Wind Slash Attacks

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Short Chapter 6 Preview:
After killing ana innocent last chapter, SEP has gotten on the nerves of Chris, who goes directly into a fight with him. Someone gets underestimated and someone gets into deep trouble when his opponent pulls out a great trick that seems impossible to handle. How will this fight end up? Find out this Thursday around noon!

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Sweet.

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Daily Bump, today with small information about how I work.

I have pretty much the whole story planned in my head, well all the main stuff at least. Before going into a new arc, I write down notes more specifically of the order stuff is happening in. I write a new chapter every Wedensday, and I give it to XIII Thursday / the next day, right after I've posted a new chapter. XIII then has one week to correct grammer before that chapter is to be posted, and so it goes on and on. Wedensday is the day I have the most time, thus why I write them there.

Well, now you know that anyways.

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One more day.

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Chapter 6 – Chris vs. SEP. The Power of Wind Slash Attacks!

“You don't look like you can do much.” SEP said and charged at Chris.
SEP made an attempt to cut Chris in half. Chris waited until the last second, then moved quickly. He dodged by leaning enough backwards so that SEP's sword flashed above him. Chris put his hands on the ground and launched off them and, kicking SEP's sword out of his hands with a backflip. The sword landed meters behind Chris.
“It seems like you're better than I thought.” SEP said.
“Damn right.” Chris said – before throwing as hard a punch as he could. SEP put his hands up to guard himself, and, while the punch made SEP slide across the ground, he had successfully blocked it.
“Although, I also think you've taken me too lightly!” SEP said with a grin on his face.
He took hold of the hand Chris had used to punch and swung Chris around in the air until he threw him right into a wall. Then he walked over and picked up his sword.
“This isn't over you know.”
“What?” SEP turned around, confused.
Chris was stuck in the wall, but was still up for battling. He slammed his elbows against the wall, so that the hole would get bigger and he could get free. SEP looked at Chris for a second, then smiled.
“Impressive. I didn't think you would be able to stand again. It looks I'll have to take this battle to another level.” SEP said.
He took his sword and swung it at great speed through the air. Chris barely managed to realize what was going on before it was too late, and dodged what SEP had sent after him. SEP had swung his sword fast enough for a sharp wind slash to be sent after Chris. Even though it didn't hit Chris, it made the hole in the wall even bigger.
That was a great attack. Looks like his sword is not only used in direct combat. I'm sure that there was connected to his special ability, but I can't quite figure it out.
“Nice dodge there. Try some more.” SEP said and swung his sword through the air several times - sending more wind slash attacks towards Chris.
Dammit, I gotta do something about that sword. Chris dodged most of them, but one of them hit his right shoulder. “Damn, it hurts.” Chris put his hand on the bleeding spot.
“You got some nice fighting skills, I'll give you that. Actually better than the last bunch of people I've killed. However, at this rate you don't stand a chance. You need to pull out whatever special ability you have, because you aren't gonna get close enough to hit me normally.”
Chris stood on one leg in pain from SEP's last attack. “I... I don't have a special ability.”
“What!? Someone with your fighting skills? I don't believe it.

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At this rate, Chris is definitely gonna die. Crimson thought. I gotta do something. “Excuse me sir, you wouldn't happen to have a rope would you?” Crimson asked some nearby people.
“Well, if you don't have a special ability then this fight wont be as fun as I had hoped it would, so I might as well end it already.” SEP said disappointed.
SEP walked towards Chris and began to swing his sword through the air constantly. Chris quickly picked up some pieces of the broken wall to protect himself from the first bunch, then ran off while dodging the next bunch.
“Stop being so reckless man!” Chris yelled. “You're killing people around us. What the hell are you!?”
“I'll gladly slaughter every single person on the planet.” SEP said. “It doesn't matter in any way.”
“What the **** are you talking about!? You're insane!”
“I'm no different from the rest. People in this world only think about their own desires and ambitions.” SEP said still swinging his sword mechanically.
“You couldn't be more wrong! I'm one of the many revolutionaries trying to change that world! There are people like that out there, but they're not everything!” Chris yelled, even though his breath was limited from dodging.
“Stop wasting your time with this foolish little speech, you wont make any progress.” SEP said. “Now die with you.” He swung even faster.
Chris was able to dodge most of it, but he started getting more scars like the one on his shoulder all over his body. His clothes were being torn to ribbons.
“Damn you!” Chris yelled.
“Your time is pretty much up now.” SEP said “And I was actually excited about this match for a short while.”
“Grab on to the rope Chris!”
Not completely realizing what happened, Chris grabbed a rope flying by at high speed, and flew away with it.
“Crimson!” Chris said happily.
Crimson had tied a rope to her body leaving the last 2 meters of it hanging. Then she flew across Chris to pick him up.
“I'm faster in air than on feet normally, but with you hanging on that might not be the case. Either way, we gotta get out here fast.”
“What the hell!” SEP said and sent some wind slash attacks after them.
“Dammit.” Crimson said panicking. She tried dodging them, but it was really troublesome for her. She twisted around in the air, with Chris flying around to all sides. Eventually he swung around Crimson enough times to get tied to her, which made Crimson lose her focus.
“Umm, I'm sorry.” Chris said as they crashed into the ground.
“That really hurt.” Crimson said. “But at least I think we got away.”

One of the men in the watching crowd turned and walked away from the hubbub, speaking into a concealed mouthpiece in his collar.
“Reporting. Two people were fighting in the street just now. One of them claimed to be a revolutionary. The other one used his sword to ruin buildings and kill people.”
“That's catastrophic! Return to base immediately!”
“Got it, WR Major Catastrophy.”

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lol I knew Cata would be the mayor XD

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"There comes a time in every man's or woman's life where they have to make **** up to cover their ass." - Hazama

I'm glad you guys noticed the hint about him being in this arc.

He's not the mayor though, he's a Major in the WR (World Rulers).

I can shortly explain this now, though it might also be explaining in some chapter. The WR system works pretty much like the army system. From highest rank to lowest;

The Leaders of the World (as chosen by god)
Generals
Brigadiers
Colonels
Majors
Lieutenants

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oops

ahh well I figured he would be something like that though

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"There comes a time in every man's or woman's life where they have to make **** up to cover their ass." - Hazama

Just to get it out there to those that might not have noticed:

Efortsatak (Name of this town) = Katastrofe backwards. Katatrofe means Catastrophe in many countries, like mine.

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Evening bump

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First true villain with a name (first one was a no name WR soldier if you have forgotten) to pop up in the story... I LIKE IT!!!

Can't wait for next weeks chapter.

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Just realized that my name is a pun: Major Catastrophy. XD

If I wasn't so tired when I read this last night I would have found it easily.

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Oh yay! You will use that pun yourself in the story, but cool that you saw it before.

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To those of you that haven't noticed the pattern.

Thursday: New chapter
Sunday: Chapter titles revealed
Monday: Preview for next chapter

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